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Rin	Mar 3 2008, 01:05 AM
TOTALLY A MAN Posts: 2,148 Group: Veteran Member #111 Joined: June 10, 2005	If this was originally what I think it is, then I can definitely see a major improvement in writing. You've got a more elegant style in this though it can be a bit chunky. Watch your dialog. You tend to end it then begin a new sentence to describe the action. Should be: "Rin is amazing," he said. not: "Pie is writing a fic like this." She described. Otherwise, awesome! Now I'm gonna write a new chapter to force you to write again, lawl.
	Av and Sig were definitely not made by Pendant or fez.

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